Buenas a todos. Aqui les traigo una historia que habia escrito hace mucho tiempo en ingles, para poder probar mis conocimientos en aquella epoca sobre este lenguaje. En todo caso, en aquella epoca me costaba mucho escribir en castellano, porque pensaba que las historias eran mejores, si podian ser leidas en todo el mundo (hoy en dia, pienso un poco diferente ). Asi que, sin mas ni mas, les dejo el primer capitulo...y gracias a todo aquel que se pase. Tengan en cuenta que quizas lo traduzca, porque igual no escribi muchos capitulos realmente, dado al hecho de que a casi nadie le gusto realmente...y por ello nunca lo escribi en castellano.
En fin, aqui les dejo la historia, y espero que les guste...suerte...
TWIN SOULS
Spoiler para Chapter 01:
Twin Souls
Good Evening, my name's John, and this is how my history begins. One day I was working on my home, and inside the loft, I found some strange lamp. As you always say, some things are destined to happen, so my history begins like this.
Chapter 1: Surprises don't come with a "hello" on it
One sunday, I was cleaning my home. Because each time I had some quality time for myself, I usually spend it on reading or just cleaning, it's a defect I have. It took me more than 3 hours just to clean the second floor. And the loft was the last place that need cleaning on the second floor. But since I had all the day long for myself, I thinked "why not?", so I started cleaning it.
That place was a mess. The reason to that was, since our moving to this house we never needed to be inside the loft. Rumors were that some kind of ghost was inside of it. Anyhow, I didn't care. It was my home, and no ghost would gonna prevent me of cleaning it.
The place was a total disaster. Spider web's all over the places, and even some kind of old clock all dusty for the time. Well, while I was cleaning, I found a lamp. That strange and bright lamp, was calling me with a sweet scent for some kind of reason. I know I was destined to find it, because the lamp said "JOHN". Maybe there was some kind of mistake, because I don't think that anybody will make me a present so lame.
Yes, I do think that "ghost", might be an invention of my father's to hide the present for my birthday since I was eight. But to an nearly eighteen person, that didn't care at all.
So, I was just holding in my hands the lamp, thinking it might be some kind of mistake. But that shining lamp was a little dirty, they always say that when you found a lamp it always comes with a genie in it. Well, my opinion was..."I DON'T BELIEVE IN FAIRYTALES". So I rubbed it anyway.
The lamp was making some strange bright lights and the sweet scent was more and more strong each second. But then, the lamp begin to make big sparks. And just before I knew it, one of them striked me on the forehead and that was the last thing I saw before I blacked out.
The first thing I did saw when I tried to return to conscience, was an angelic face telling me something like "Don't die on me".
Then, I woke up in the hospital with a bandage over my head, and some strange machine connected to my heart.
There I was looking to the roof, without a single clue of why I was there. I tried to jump out of my bed, but inside of the room was a girl with his head down on a chair, with the so called lamp in her hands.
I tried to don't do any kind noise, just to don't wake up that poor girl. "She might be some kind of nurse", I thought to myself. But when I was just taking the first foot out of the bed, she started speaking...
-I cryed a lot, you know. For a moment I thought you were gonna die.
-You worried about me? - I was confused. Why a stranger would care about me? - So, who are you?
-This lamp was the actual cause of your black out...
-Uhh? What are you...- then I remembered everything, the lamp, the sparks, everything. - How do you..?!! Who in hell are you?!!!!
-I was released from this lamp, and I'm your one and only. Your past and future, your truly TWIN SOUL.
End of first chapter.
I do hope that you enjoyed this short beggining of the history, next week I'm gonna start writing the second chapter. I have come with a name for the chapter 2: "the best things from life, don't need an explanation". Thank you for reading, and see you soon.
Jonatan Sanchez. A.K.A Zanzoltan.
PD: Excuse the type-o, as you know, I'm an Argentinian, and I don't know a lot of words in english, so I'm doing my best just to make the most readable as possible. Thank you.
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Respuesta: Historia Original en ingles: Twin Souls
Hombre... la historia es buena, aunque... no se, no me gusta tanto (je+je=ja).. Aunque no hacia falta k dijeras al final k eres argentino y no sbaes MUY bien ingles (o algo asi, no?) Bueno... adios!
Respuesta: Historia Original en ingles: Twin Souls
Gracias, pero, era necesario para poder dar a entender que a veces me equivocaba en algunos conceptos y verbos. Ahora me he perfeccionado un poco, y por lo tanto puedo escribir un poco mas armado. No mucho, pero si un poco. En todo caso, mañana subo el segundo capitulo. Si es que les interesa realmente. Yo habia escrito unos tres o cuatro capitulos, y lo iba a hacer igual de largo que "La Luz y La Oscuridad".
Pero, como vi que a nadie le importaba, decidi dejarlo por la mitad en aquella epoca (o sea, hace unos dos años atras...). En todo caso, diganme que les parece el siguiente capitulo y si merece la pena que lo siga o no. Y la unica razon que lo habia escrito era para probar que tan bien me iba en ingles, pero, despues me copé un poco y segui escribiendo, por lo menos por dos capitulos mas.... Asi que, esperen a otro dia, que posteo los proximos...
Nuevamente, gracias por pasar....
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